Write an “I am” poem

I know I can do this when I Use the template to write my poem Write each line in full sentences        Use punctuation correctly like A . , !

I am Lani Roxburgh. I wonder about my friends. I hear Voices in the air. I see a view from my home. I want some of my friends to stop being mean. I am Kind to the world. I pretend My life is perfect. I feel Generous to the world. I touch Water as it slowly fades away. I worry About my papa in hospital. I am friendly to everyone. I understand why some of my friends are being mean   I say I'm just telling the truth about how their acting I try to make them nice again it sometimes works I hope they belive me I am glad i’m me

Two Stars and a wish I used the  template to write my poem I used punctuation and used full sentences I could use more detail

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All about me!

I am learning to write an autobiography about myself I will be successful when I can Use a plan to generate ideas for my story (Y-chart) Introduce who I am Describe what I look like, what I like to do and some interesting facts about me. Include WOW words in my writing Begin to revise and edit my work

All about me! Kia ora my name is Lani I go to mangonui school.              I have brown hair and brown eyes and I'm tanned. I look like my dad.                                                                                                                                                                                                     I hate playing soccer,cricket,tennis, and walking and running for a long time. I wish my teachers knew I'm smart,funny,fun and silly oh and good writer and good listener. I live with my mum ,big sister ,step dad 2nd house,dad ,baby brother ,baby sister  ,and step mum. The people important to me in my life are family,friend,and pets. I have five cats henry,skittles,sushi,ginger,and gray fluff and I have a dog poppy. Poppy lives with my dad and the cats with my mum I love spending time with family and friends,and I love swimming and snorkeling, and I just love family. Ko mamari te waka Ko whakaroro-raagiputa te maunga Ko awaroa te awa Ko  Te rarawa te iwi Ko Ngati huia te hapu Ko Te kotahitangi te marae Ko Ange raua ko Rocky oku matua Ko Lani toku ingoa

Two Stars and a wish I liked all the colour. I liked how when I read it just reminds me of my dads family. I wish I could do better